Seven Small Deferences

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The first one was easy, the way these things always are.

It was January 1987, and Dennis Krause was thirty-four years old, sitting in a vinyl booth at a diner on Sunset Boulevard, nursing a cup of coffee that had gone cold twenty minutes ago, waiting for a man named Leo Farnum to tell him whether his script was going to get made. The script was called Crossfire, and it was about a journalist who uncovers a conspiracy inside the Defense Department, and Dennis had been working on it for two years, and he believed, with the kind of desperate faith that only someone who has been told no seventeen times can believe, that this was the one.

Leo arrived forty minutes late, which was early by Leo's standards. He slid into the booth across from Dennis, signaled the waitress for a coffee, black, and said, I read it.

And?

And its good. Its real good. But its too long.

Dennis nodded. He had expected this. He had notes. I can trim twenty pages, easy. The second act has some fat.

Leo shook his head. Its not about the page count, Dennis. Its about the ending. The journalist wins. He exposes the conspiracy. He saves the day. Thres no heat.

Its based on a true story.

Leo laughed, a short, barking sound that did not involve his eyes. Its not based on anything. Its a script. And scripts need heat. The journalist loses. The conspiracy wins. Thats real. Thats what people want to see. They want to walk out of the theater feeling like the world is exactly as fucked as they thought it was.

Dennis looked at his cold coffee. The journalist losing went against everything he believed about storytelling, about structure, about the moral arc of the universe. But he had been saying no for two years, and saying no had gotten him nowhere, and Leo Farnum was the first producer who had actually read past page ten.

He made the change. It took him three days. He changed the ending so that the journalist's source was killed and the conspiracy was buried and the final scene was the journalist sitting alone in his apartment, watching the news report on a different scandal, knowing that the real story would never be told. It was a better ending. That was the hell of it. Leo had been right. It had more heat.

The script sold for sixty thousand dollars. It was never made. The option lapsed, and the rights reverted, and Crossfire went into a drawer where it sat for years, gathering dust and the smell of old paper. But the check had cleared, and Dennis had been able to pay his rent, and he had learned something that he would spend the next twelve months telling himself was a lesson about craft and not a lesson about compromise.

What he had actually learned was this: you could change one thing, and the world would not end. You could change one thing, and you would still be the same person in the morning. You could change one thing, and the only difference would be that you had sixty thousand dollars you did not have before.

The second one was harder, but not much.

A studio called Monarch Pictures had hired Dennis for a rewrite on a script called Hard Target, a Vietnam veterans revenge story that had been through four writers already and had the scar tissue to prove it. The producer, a man named Walter Scheck, had a specific note: the villain, a corrupt CIA officer, needed to be Vietnamese.

Why? Dennis asked.

Because we have a Vietnamese actor attached, Walter said. Sonny Tran. You know him?

I know him, Dennis said. He was in that movie about the refugee camp.

Thats the one. Look, Dennis, were not asking for much. Just change the nationality. Everything else stays the same. The guy is still a villain. Hes still corrupt. Hes just—different, now.

Dennis said he would think about it. He went home and opened his copy of the script and read the villain scenes. They were generic. The character had no interior life, no cultural specificity, no reason for being corrupt beyond the fact that the plot required him to be. Changing his nationality would not make the script worse. It would not make the character more offensive than he already was. It was just a name change, a few lines of dialogue, a new backstory paragraph.

He did it. It took him four hours. The movie was released in 1988 to terrible reviews and a moderate box office. Dennis's name appeared in the credits, buried in the middle of the list: Additional Dialogue by. He did not put it on his resume. But he cashed the check.

The third one was a favor for a friend.

The friend was named Gary Milner, and he was a line producer on a low-budget horror film called Slaughterhouse Night. Gary needed someone to punch up the dialogue for a scene involving a character who was a Middle Eastern terrorist. The character had exactly four lines. The movie was going straight to video. Nobody would ever see it.

Dennis did the punch-up in his living room on a Sunday afternoon, between loads of laundry. He changed the dialogue to make the character sound more menacing. He added a line about America being the Great Satan. He did not think about it. He did not think about it because he had trained himself, over the preceding year, to think about scripts as technical problems and not as statements. A line of dialogue was a line of dialogue. It moved the plot forward. It established stakes. It was not a moral position.

Gary sent him a check for five hundred dollars and a case of cheap wine. Dennis drank the wine and deposited the check and told himself that he was being pragmatic, that the horror movie would vanish into the vast reservoir of forgotten VHS tapes, that nobody would ever connect his name to it, that it did not matter.

He was right about the movie. It vanished. He was right about his name. Nobody connected it. But the line of dialogue he had written — the line about the Great Satan — stayed with him. It stayed with him in the way that a splinter stays with you, small and invisible and capable of surprising pain when you press on it in the wrong moment.

The fourth one came from Leo again.

Leo had a new project, a thriller called Nightfall Protocol. The script was about a covert government program that used psychological manipulation to turn ordinary citizens into assassins. It was the kind of premise that Dennis would have found morally repugnant three years ago. Now he found it commercially viable.

We need a scene, Leo said, where the handler recruits a new asset. The asset is a college kid, idealistic, wants to change the world. The handler convinces him that the program is necessary, that sometimes you have to do bad things for good reasons. Its the key scene in the movie. It has to sell the whole premise.

Dennis wrote the scene. He wrote it in three drafts, each one tighter than the last. He gave the handler the best arguments, the most persuasive rhetoric, the kind of logic that sounded reasonable in a dark room and fell apart in the light of day. He made the case for doing bad things for good reasons. He made it so well that Leo called him after reading the final draft and said, Jesus, Dennis, you almost convinced me.

Dennis laughed. It was a joke. But he felt something in his chest, a small, quiet alarm that he had been hearing more and more often, a sound that he had learned to ignore the way you learn to ignore a dripping faucet when you cannot afford a plumber.

He was becoming good at this. That was the problem. He was becoming very good at writing arguments that he did not believe, at making villains sympathetic and heroes compromised, at lubricating the machinery of stories that he would not have wanted his mother to watch. He was becoming a craftsman. And craftsmen, he had learned, did not ask what they were building. They just built it.

The fifth one was not a script.

It was a Wednesday afternoon in October when a man named Paul Voss called him. Paul Voss was not a producer. He was not in the movie business at all. He was a lawyer who represented a man named Raymond Torricelli, who was, according to the Los Angeles Times, a businessman with ties to organized crime. Raymond Torricelli was also, according to Paul Voss, a potential investor in a film project that Dennis had been trying to get off the ground for two years.

Hes interested, Paul said. But he wants to meet you. He wants to get a sense of who hes doing business with.

Dennis almost said no. He should have said no. He knew he should have said no. But the project was important to him. It was the first thing he had written in two years that had not been a favor or a punch-up or a compromise. It was his own script, start to finish, and it was good, and nobody would finance it, and Raymond Torricelli had money.

He met Torricelli at a restaurant in Beverly Hills, a place with white tablecloths and waiters who spoke in murmurs. Torricelli was a large man in an expensive suit, with hands that looked like they had been used for purposes other than signing checks. He ordered a steak, rare, and a bottle of wine that cost more than Dennis's rent, and he talked about movies. He talked about how much he loved movies. He talked about how Hollywood was full of phonies who did not understand real storytelling.

I like your script, Torricelli said. Its honest. Its about a man who does what he has to do. I respect that.

Dennis nodded. He did not say that the script was about a firefighter who risks his life to save a child. He did not say that the man in the script did what he had to do because it was the right thing to do. He let Torricelli interpret the story however he wanted. He let Torricelli see himself in it.

The deal fell through. Torricelli was indicted three months later on charges of racketeering, and Dennis's script went back into the drawer, and he told himself that he had dodged a bullet. But he had not dodged it. He had stood in front of it and let it pass through him, and the hole it left was small, barely visible, easily ignored. But it was there.

The sixth one was a rewrite on a script that had been written by a woman named Rachel Okonkwo. Rachel was a black writer, and her script was about a black family in South Central Los Angeles, and it was the most honest thing Dennis had read in years. It had been optioned by a studio that did not know what to do with it, and they had brought Dennis in to make it more commercial.

The note was simple: change the family from black to white.

They are not saying that, Dennis said to the executive, a woman named Cheryl Barnes who had the kind of smile that made you feel like you were being photographed. They are not saying that, Cheryl said. They are saying that the script is too specific. It needs to appeal to a wider audience.

The family is black, Dennis said. The whole script is about what it means to be black in this city. You change that, you dont have a script.

Cheryl shrugged. You can write a new script. We have other writers.

Dennis went home and sat in his apartment and looked at the script on his desk. It was a good script. It was an important script. It was a script that he had no right to touch, and he knew it. But he wanted to stay in the game. He wanted to keep working. He wanted to not go back to waiting tables at the restaurant in West Hollywood where the tips were bad and the manager was a man who enjoyed making people feel small.

He called Rachel Okonkwo. He told her what the studio was asking. He told her that he had turned it down.

She was silent for a long time. Then she said, Thank you. But he heard something in her voice that was not gratitude. It was sadness. It was the sadness of someone who had been through this before, who knew that the outcome was already written, that his refusal would not save her script. It would just mean that someone else would be hired to do what he would not do.

The studio hired someone else. The script was rewritten. The family became white. The movie was released and disappeared. Rachel Okonkwo left the business and became a teacher. Dennis did not call her. He did not know what to say.

The seventh one was an accident. He told himself it was an accident. He told himself for years.

It was December 1987, and Dennis was at a Christmas party in a house in the Hollywood Hills, a house that belonged to a producer named Mickey DeMarco, who was known for his cocaine habit and his ability to get difficult projects financed. The party was loud and expensive and full of people whose names Dennis recognized from the trades. He was standing by the bar, nursing a drink he did not want, when Mickey sidled up to him.

I heard you do good work, Mickey said. I heard you can write a scene that makes anything sound reasonable.

Ive been told that, Dennis said.

I have a project, Mickey said. A small thing. A script that needs a polish. But theres a question of ownership. The original writer, he had a disagreement with the financiers. He is not going to be involved anymore. The script needs a new name on it. Someone who can clean it up and not ask too many questions.

What kind of questions?

Mickey smiled. The kind that do not have profitable answers.

Dennis looked at the drink in his hand. He looked at the room full of people who had all made their own compromises, their own small deflections, their own quiet agreements to look the other way. He thought about the journalist in Crossfire, the one whose source had been killed because Dennis had changed the ending. He thought about the Vietnamese villain and the terrorist dialogue and the script he had written that made doing bad things sound reasonable. He thought about Rachel Okonkwo, who had left the business because people like him had not done enough.

He said yes.

It was not a loud yes. It was not a decisive yes. It was a yes murmured over a glass of cheap champagne, a yes that could be taken back, a yes that was barely a yes at all. But it was a yes, and it was the last one, and it was the one that mattered.

The script turned out to be a cover for a money laundering operation. Dennis did not know that when he agreed. He might have suspected it. He might have chosen not to suspect it. The distinction, by that point, was academic. The script was written, the names were changed, the money moved from one place to another, and Dennis Krause, screenwriter, became Dennis Krause, fixer.

He did not plan it. He did not wake up one morning and decide to become the kind of man who laundered money through movie scripts. He became that man the same way water becomes ice: one degree at a time, one small compromise at a time, each step so insignificant that it could be dismissed, forgotten, rationalized. Until one day the temperature dropped one more degree, and he was solid.

The project fell apart eventually, the way those projects always did. Mickey DeMarco was investigated, the money trail went cold, and Dennis was never charged with anything. He was never even questioned. He was a ghost in the system, a name on a document that nobody would ever read.

He kept working. He kept writing. He kept taking checks and making changes and telling himself that the next project would be different, that the next script would be his, that he would draw a line and not cross it.

He never drew the line. He did not know where to draw it. He had been crossing for so long that the line had worn away, smeared by the pressure of a thousand small deferences, until there was nothing left to cross.

On New Years Eve, he stood on the balcony of his apartment and watched the fireworks over Los Angeles. The city was a carpet of lights, each one a house, each house a person, each person making the same small calculations he had made, the same small adjustments to the shape of who they were. He wondered how many of them could feel it happening. He wondered how many of them knew, as he knew, that they had not become someone else. They had simply become more of what they already were, one small yes at a time, until the accumulation of yeses weighed more than any no ever could.

He went inside. He closed the sliding door. The fireworks continued without him, and the city continued without him, and Dennis Krause sat down at his desk and opened a blank page and began to write.


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